Thread:ExdeathsBagel/@comment-31401828-20171015172518/@comment-31401828-20171223124445


 * sigh*

Ok so i just checked it out and i'll be honest with you.... i can see why you weren't happy with it..

don't get me wrong its not bad and certainly don't dislike it but.. it just seems unfinished.. like you could have done alot more than this and we both know you can.

also

I think this is a good example of why you should take your time and DONT rush the story (yes it feels rushed to)

i've made it clear manny times that i can wait ass long as you need.

So please next time take your time.. i hate it when people write under pressure.

Verdict: Not bad but you can do better, i know you can.