User blog comment:SmutAuthor97/Hyena Girl rough Draft/@comment-38768695-20190311002106

I really like the idea of a Hyena based Mamono! And you already have a great start as well. I was especially happy to see you wanting to incorporate the Female Spotted Hyena genital structure; such a unique feature of the hyena definitely needs to be incoprporated as well as the signature laugh in some way.

Firstly, you should shorten the personality traits a little to simplify it slightly. Rather than 7 it would be better to shorten it to about three; I would recomend choosing the Dominant, Cunning and Social traits over the others. Also, instead of saying meat, use 'Carnivorous' when addressing dietary needs.

Other than the basic information I mentioned above, the only other things that would need addressing would be the wording of some phrases and such.

As for incorporating the genital structure - perhaps, due to men that also inhabit savanahs having grown more wary of hyenas ambushing them at sources of water, it has become far more difficult for packs to obtain a husband, that being the reasoning as of to why they are so few in number in packs. The difficulty of obtaining one also causes rivalry between other packs in the area that wish to steal the husband away for themselves, much like how real hyenas will often steal what's left of a carcass from cheetahs and the like in real life.

What sets Hyena apart from other Mamono however, is that they don't resolve conflicts between their packs through violence. What they do instead, is they try and force the opposing pack into submission using their unique genital structure, it having the opposite effects of their vagina(That being how their vagina causes extreme pleasure for their husband, the phallus causes extreme discomfort/pain) on their victim. However, the hyena who is forcing another into submission experience some pleasure from the act, although no where near as much s they would get from a man.

In these disputes, often times the pack with more members wins due to their sheer number overwhlming the enemy. This would also provide more reasoning as of to why it would be very difficult to be alone and without a pack as a solo hyena would be unable to fend off a pack who wishes to steal her husband. At the end of each rivalry battle, the victors would take the man while laughing characteristically at their opponents defeat.

As a quick side note; maybe solo hyenas are notorious for stealing women when they can't obtain a man, using her to satisfy their desires in place of a man. As a side-effect, the woman becomes 'bound' in a way to the hyena like a companion who's only use is to satisfy the hyena maybe?