Talk:Fallen Brides Story: Mimil, "Gift"/@comment-ArmInAss-20150416085732/@comment-Kuruni-20150416160916

"and break nations"

Just want to point out a dilemma on your statement. Breaking naton sound bad, true, but we're talking about breaking hopelessly corrupt nation here, so it's not really bad.

"...but then I remembered where I am."

Good, if you really remember, try to keep the writing tone matching whre you are. Really, you start ok, maybe lacking in substance and try too much on making thing out of nothing (OCG article), but at least the tone and writing style is ok and it's ok for info summary. But it got worse as you write more, the tone become more like you're writing your own blog and it clash with the main text (Pleasure runes article, you can't even go pass the first line before throwing pointless "(if you couldn't guess)", which break the tone from start). Also Saphirette Spherica has a section header being referrence to MGQ, so much of remember where you are, right?