User blog comment:AloofComputer/Love Never Dies - Lich/@comment-32042142-20190525081446

I didn't know that you were wwriting story, now I have lot of things to read! x)

(You can make yourself knew by the other user of the wikia with this thread)

For the story, it's a good story, but there is few incoherence : You mention several time that Vanessa is breahing (heavily for example), but as an undead Lich, she wouldn't be breathing at all except for talking.

In some context, I could say the same thing for the fact her body should not be warm, but the profile is pretty unclear about the fact undead body can be flustered and warm at time, so there is no problemd there.

I'm looking forward for more.