User blog comment:RealityWarper/Hellhound College Guard/@comment-23603505-20151027184824

This story is very misleading, it doesn't sound like a what would you do from the title it sounds more like a second person POV story.

This is something I like the premise however the grammer espeally at the beginning is very hasty. I don't want to hear She beats the crap out of them I actually want to see the action that could have really drew me in. this storry suffers from an identy crisis and vaugeness