User blog comment:CyberWizard/Diary of a lizard girl Chapter 2 Inferiority/@comment-27570904-20160323190533

Well I do see potential some things ha need to be addressed. 1. Cool it with the exclamation points. Not a negative criticism here, just trying to help. It just makes it look like these characters are just constantly shouting and it seems kind of odd. 2. Make sure people know who is talking, otherwise it can be confusing. 3. Also calm down with the commas. tgere are sentences with way too many. 4. Grammar. This is very important and correcting mistakes is as easy as copy and pasting it into a word document or anything that does spellcheck to fix grammatical errors.

I hope I could be of help to you.