Thread:Flodoomable/@comment-25566645-20141022234416/@comment-5426290-20141221120029

It was a good story, there where some things that seemed strange though..

''[He was tall. Taller than me by an inch or two, so he was tall.]''

This guy has a fascination for being tall.

[my water-laden boot collided heavily with his face]

He kicked a tall guy who was even taller than him in the face? Is his leg still attached?

[But you wanted 'im so bad, you can have 'im!"]

Not sure what happened to the punctuation here..

[Tri-cigar] The story is depressing, the tri-cigar is silly, these two things look a bit off when combined.

I personally don't like the overall depressed mood in the story, but there are others that do. Good fanfiction I would say.