Thread:AngryLance/@comment-37028137-20200128044919/@comment-39280634-20200220175803

Phew, theres a lot to unpack here. First off, I want to thank you for taking the time to give these a look and there's no way I could fault you for being late (I know you're a busy guy so I understand). I'm happy to know that I managed to impress you a little, as it confirms to myself that I am somewhat competent at this (yay needforvalidation, lol). I also have some questions to ask and some explanations to do because the situation of these fics is a little different.

1) the issues with my character's backstory: you said you don't like narration and exposition. The way I set up the story was like a recounting of events from Lance's perspective and telling what he knows to some third party,namely the reader;keep in mind that this was my FIRST fic ever and didn't look up much writing techniques.

I would say that I don't see nothing wrong with them, but I guess that's exactly a rookie thing to say. Now, I don't mind discarding these methods if I know how, so if you could give me some pointers (and even examples) on what to do, that would be awesome.

2) The stories are mainly short because I can't write all that much (I'm a slow writer, on top of struggling with creativity and complexity AND having few windows to get to work on them). So I go with a simple style and/or plot.

3) These stories are actualy meant to be a background or a set up for an RP I had with Jeiel and not actualy a novel: https://monstergirlencyclopedia.fandom.com/wiki/Thread:992179?useskin=oasis. He's kinda missing at the moment so that piece of story is currently in Limbo. I also got into RP at the advice of Hound, when I was feeling burned out and wanted to do more on this site. I came up with my character so I can fit in the other guys' little 'shared universe' here, make stories through RP and maybe fill in the gaps between RP's with fics for my character.

4) If anything, I would like to know if there are pacing issues or plot holes (the later are rather urgent to fix for me). I also would like know what you think of Lance's former opposition (his grandfather being this geologist/historian turned mad cultist)

5) No, weirdly enough, those kind of symbiotes aren't quite sentient (didn't want to copy Venom too much) and there are a few reasons for that, which I would love to further discuss with you if you're still interested, among other things.