Thread:Flodoomable/@comment-25566645-20141022234416/@comment-25566645-20141221200242

Hmm, that's a good point about kicking the guy. I did mention that he was doubled over, but I admit fully that it's not totally clear he was lower than a standing position.

With the pronunciation, since it's the character talking, as opposed to just thinking, his speech degrades in comparison. Also he was trying to sound tough and assholeish.

The mood of the story was depressing, hmm? Interesting, I hadn't noticed that. If you would kindly explain in what ways and which areas potray this mood, I'd appreciate it, because yes, with things like "tri-cigar" I was trying to keep the story from taking itself too seriously.

Also, there's more to come, this is only the first part of the story. The second part should be much more lighthearted, but I'm experiencing a crisis with a large section that I felt was really well-written but may spoil a future plot point if included. Basically I'm crying over having to cut text. qq