Thread:HoundTheDestroyer93/@comment-27495139-20160322043322/@comment-25808351-20160323003437

Ok buddy, very good. Few errors.

At 14: prepare.You 68: room t o each 99: be the calling the shot? 203: Maryy us at once!

Ok I also noticed that when you mentioned Terry being captured you changed it from a Sphinx to a Griffin. Other then that it was a bit short but you explained at the end you plan to expand on Andre and Aria's relationship, so it's ok. Also the Apophis (in canon) don't really try to kill Pharaohs just bite them and drive them crazy with lust, but this is ok too. It's a fanfic, so whatever floats your boat buddy.

All in all I liked it and the disclaimers you put in there will give readers a heads up on the length and future of Andre. So well done sir. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.... oh, and when your not writing and have the time, browse around the community. Maybe participate in some of the Roleplay boards, discussion boards or just leave comments in some of Monster Girl profile pages.