User blog comment:AngryLance/A brave new world, a scared young heart - Part 1/@comment-25808351-20190929140726

Not a bad start. A simple read with an overarching plot that is open for complex future chapters. Meri Bell is a cute character with a cute name. Lance’s powers will be interesting to see in action.

My only criticism is the grammar. Saw a few grammatical errors here and there, but nothing that hurt the story or broke the narrative.

Gonna be interesting for Marcus to stroke through Mirefield with a guy like Lance on watch.