Thread:AngryLance/@comment-37028137-20200128044919/@comment-37028137-20200306234918

Greetings Lance,

Certainly, I'd be happy too. While I've got you here I actually had a couple questions for you.

I was wondering if you might do a review of the chapters I published for my novel on here. The feedback is indispensable, and helps me so very much. I really want to get better as I go so what better way eh? (Be forewarned, the first 10 chapters are the dregs, in my opinion.)

My second though was I am planning to do a sort of montage of planets and locations that Nicholas and Vellantha visit. And skipping through time as they do it so as to add a much needed sense of 'time passing' to their travels.

Seeing as their both Immortal age is meaningless in the grand sense. So I planned to do a few vignettes, of their travels before the main adventure of the chapters sets in. So for instance maybe 3 in total. Where the first jumps into the future 5 or so years have passed and their working on the starships and travelling in the TARDIS, then jump say, 70 years and do another quick planet, their fleeing danger and whatnot. Then again with say 300 years and that's where the chapter's main story picks up.

So in essence the 'Hero Montage' so we see them travelling and helping out in several quick (or long, depends how I write.) scenes to establish themselves as heroes before getting to the 'meat and potatoes' of the story.

I'm asking because I'd like to move the plot along and get to the action now that I've established the characters but I'm worried folks will hate the idea. What do you think is it good or bad.

I'll check out your post and have a response some time in the morning.

Cheers,

The Weary TimeLord.

P.S.

This just occured to me but you don't speak the same language as me. (I've said it before but I honestly forget that, you're that good a speaker.)

But if any of my expressions or euphemisms don't make sense please ask me to clarify. I'm writing in two languages so I can forget to 'edit myself' as it were.