User blog comment:AngryLance/A brave new world, a scared young heart - Part 1/@comment-28144855-20190929132506

Pretty decent so far. I like it, simple and to the point. I like Meri Bell's character she's like a sweet country girl, too inocent for Lance's past world. A person that can surely help heal his inner wounds.

A minor critique for the calendar thing. Not that I'm the one who can speak of conveying thoughts into English text like the one from Oxford uni, but to me it sounded a bit forced, as if he expected such an answer.

The rest was a neat origin story.

The other thing is more of Meta nature, namely we, the readers only have your Bio as info about the Geode. We're left wondering and pondering... Form where it originates, how did your gramps get a hold of it and most importantly how many different places it connects?