User blog comment:ArmInAss/Ivan Grozny (Prologue)/@comment-25720867-20150321104204

Ya indeed, needs MOAR vodka. Thats what I'd need.

But you, just need some more practice. Give it several more reads. There are places where one word is utilised twice. That should not be. Try finding a synonim or modify the sentence, so that this inconvinience does not occur again.

Not just that. Some sentences are too long. They combine halves of two different subjects, and make a hard to understand mess.

Not to worry though, you are a rookie. Mistakes are bound to happen. All of us went through it. If you want to become a master, then you should know what someone said: 'Practice makes perfect.'