Thread:Flodoomable/@comment-24026095-20170501060709/@comment-5426290-20170501140545

Your fanfic was enjoyable. (^w^)b

It was of moderate size and quite fun to read. I chuckled a few times at the scenery that was described and I than you for making it out of the blue. (0w0)/

There where a couple things that did confuse me while I was reading (0.0)/ :

1 The random Japanese [okāsan, musuko, etc].

2 The personality of the Main Character. The main character really deserves the punishment, the things he does at school are pretty unnecessarily shitty to those around him.

3 The slightly too long explanations that interrupt and confuse the current events. [2 lines of the scene with Ogre-mother, 5 lines of a scene with a teacher, then 1 more line about the Ogre-mother.]

4 The confusing way of wording a sentence.