User blog comment:The Weary TimeLord/Memoir of a Dimension Hopping Madman: Love in the face of pain. Chapter 3./@comment-32042142-20200224202813/@comment-37028137-20200224210000

Thank you for your comments Dreamer,

Most of your points will be addressed as the novel goes along. (Why he looks, acts, and appears 'like' the Doctor, There are also a number of differences which will become starkly apparent.)

I also I dropped the 'Elsewhere' thing after this chapter, and don't use it again. Though I do swap between Nick and Vellantha's perspectives in the novel so the reader gets a sense of their personality and thoughts. This will be clearly marked with banners like  Nick’s Perspective  or  Vellantha's Perspective.  I really wanted to get inside their heads as it goes along and I've already written over thirty chapters so it's pretty set in stone. As for line breaks, I loathe that style but I will break up dialogue by having the character perform an action. (Again it gets better as the chapters go along.)

As for the 'narration' I stopped doing that early on too. I was experimenting with styles when I started and just left it in. (As I mentioned the first 10 chapters are a big rough around the edges as I was still finding my way with the novel.)

As for the whole "Where is he, Nick is never late.” thing; it was meant as a joke to the reader. Perhaps I did not make it clear enough. Nick is always late, they just don't know that, because he is a Time Lord and he pops back in time to 'appear' on time. But since the TARDIS was broken he couldn't do so.

If the Omniverse jumping scenario isn't your cup of tea then I suggest you stop reading now, since that is the entire premise of the novel. I spelt it out in the title fairly blatantly.

Otherwise thank you for the comments they were most appreciated.

Cheers,

The Weary TimeLord.

Edit: Sorry forgot to mention the Dimensional Hopping is part of the two main characters finding a way to allow Mamono to Birth Male Offspring. Which will be revealed in a later chapter, these first ones aim to develop character traits and motivations.