User blog comment:UnbalancedSpoon/Healing Grace (Harem): Pilot/@comment-32042142-20181212174406

Well... As far I can't tell it's not badly written, but I'm not good to tell that kind of thing.

But I will be honest : What did you expect from us with this first "chapter", we litereallyhad 0 exposition of wathever the serie will be, it's just a smut with no actual character, the only thing we learn from the story is that the MC name is Blake, he is having sex with 2 women (one a Mindflayer? Not sure), aaaaannnd.... that's all...

Maybe you make a confusing beginning on purpose, it can be a choice, actually it's an interessing way to begin a story. But I can't really give my opinion about your story if there is no story ._.

I know I'm really harsh here, even more when it's you first story, but I prefer to be honest in my critics.^^"