User blog comment:Alpha 2 Charlie/The Bunker/@comment-25113070-20140714173838

not detracting you from writing, it Is a good start, you just want to work on your sentance structure to help the flow of the story when describing and explaining.

As I opened the worn out rusty squeaky wooden door, I walk in with the creeping groaning sounds coming from the old floorboard as I walk slowly over them with my fairly worn boots. I kept on walking right passed the kitchen which really contained a small furnace with coal, a food chest, and a table for two. I opened another door which also lead to my bedroom, the bedroom was averaged sized, a bed for two, a simple nightstand, and a kerosene lantern which lit the room entirely and a wardrobe. I then sat on my bed, relieved for another day from work. I reached down to my boots and unlaced them, releasing the firm grip from my feet and finally laying back to relax.

e.g a better interpretation would be.

Opening the wooden door i entered the room to be greeted by the rusty squeek of hinges and the groaning creek of old floorboards, my old boots padded lightly on the floor as i passed a small sparse kitchen with its old coal furnace dimly lighting a lone table at its centre. Opening the adjacent door it lead to a small bedroom containning a double bed and nighstand bathed in the light of a small kerosene lamp that flickered from the table beside the wardrobe. I entered the room and sat on the bed sighing in relief at finishing another hard days work, eventually taking off my boots to then lay back and relax.

not saying i am an expert, my first drafts are pretty poor as i splurge out story till i go over it again. but its an idea to help the readability and flow.

Keep at it, would like to hear the continuation, it has a very Fallout Vibe going but instead of ghouls and deathclaws you have lizardmen and lich :P