User blog comment:AngryLance/A brave new world, a scared young heart - Part 1/@comment-26517142-20190929203441

A decent start. You're working on your character origins, so it doesn't have to be anything near extravagant, hehe. XD All that being said, nice work. I agree with latter comments on making some grammar checks, but it's an overall peach. Keep it up, man.

Also... Merri has ... huge bazongas. Like, wow. Bigger than Jeiel's Holsty, not gonna lie.