User blog comment:Anonlink/Remember Wendy? Mindflayer one shot./@comment-1826623-20160317020555

Oh my...oh my indeed! I'm sure you're aware of your grammar, so I'll skip that part of the review. The plot was definitely something fresh and worked well with the Mindflayer's entry in the MGE. What I would suggest is that you try to keep the story in one piece. Quite a few times, I would be thinking "Wait, what just happened?", especially right when I get into the story. It's such a tease, and while I did enjoy it, don't do it again please. I'm aware that this is your first time with fanfiction, but it's okay to take the story at your own pace. That's one of the reasons why it takes so long for me to post new stuff, but I'm sure you can agree that it's well-worth the wait. Other than those things, I enjoyed your work quite a bit and it left me wanting more...which is why I'll move on to review your other work! Keep working on it and soon enough you'll be better than me! :D