User blog:GlintLock/Hellhounder Part 1

Hey guys Vax here. Just wanted to introduce myself before we get started. I also wanted to let you know that this is my first Fan Fic! Ever! Anyways, it's a first draft so let me know if there's anything you think needs MAJOR changing or there's something really annoying happening in the writing, like constantly repeated words. (No one likes that) Anywho, I won't keep you so without further ado, enjoy...

Hellhounder Part 1

The landscape moves past me as my cart rolls down the trail, the road abundant with roots and rocks that make for quite the uncomfortable trip. Looking up at the sun, I surmised I had about 4 hours of daylight left before I had to make camp for the night. I had heard these roads were dangerous at night, and that bandits had already robbed many merchants and caravans that had travelled though this path. I sighed, and looked around me, checking for any signs of danger. Nothing, except the chirping of a few birds and the buzz of a few insects. I hadn't really wanted to use this path, but it was the only way I was going to make my delivery on time. This narrow road wasn't safe, not only because of bandits, but because of the road itself. It was built in the side of a mountain, and to my immediate left there was a steep drop right Ito the dense forest below. I shuddered, looking down at the ominous drop below me. As I rounded the bend, my horse started to become nervous. "What is it girl?" I asked the horse. She responded with a look of fear and worry as if to tell me, "Let's get out of here!" But then there was a loud crack, followed by a rumbling that was growing closer with every passing second! I looked up, only to find myself faced with an avalanche of boulders hurtling towards me! My horse had lost any nerve it had left and bucked wildly, throwing the reigns free and speeding off down the mountain. Alone now, I had only a few seconds to react before those boulders squashed me like a bug. I tried to leap from the cart just as the first boulder connected with the cart. The cart began to flip and I started free falling from the cart, off the edge of the cliff and into the trees below, waiting with outstretched branches. The wind whipped past my face and although I wanted to scream, no noise escaped my throat. I felt paralyzed with fear as I hurtled towards the trees. I impacted hard into the first tree, and the branches splintered under my momentum. I could feel them scratching and cutting me all over. I had closed my eyes to avoid the branches that might have gouged them out, but when I opened them I saw that I was only about 10 feet away from ground and when I hit it everything went black. I don't know how long I had been out, but it must not have been long because it was still about midday. I could hear voices, and they didn't sound too far away. I struggled to get up, while still trying to find out who was speaking and where they were. As I put one foot down to try and stand, pain shot through my leg and I cried out in shock. I looked down and didn't like what I saw. "Crap, I think it's broken." I said to my self. "Hey, I think it came from over here!" That voice was close by. I hobbled over to a nearby bush and toppled in, thinking they might be bandits. Several men barged into the clearing I had landed in, and I knew from the sight of them that they were bandits. I cursed, this meant that they had been the ones to attack me and that my cargo was gone too. They were probably trying to find me and get rid of me so I couldn't warn others of the danger her. As the bandits continued to search for me, I watched intently, failing to notice the shadow creeping up behind me. Something hits my head and I go down and for the second time that day I black out. I tried opening my eyes, but could only get them open a sliver, just enough to see some form dragging me by my arms and although I try to say something, and the words just won't come out, and I lose consciousness from the pain and exhaustion.

End of part 1

So let me know what you thought and make sure to tune in next time for part 2!! Vax, out.