Board Thread:What Would You Do?/@comment-36855838-20181214151128/@comment-36855838-20181217074329

Butterkingly wrote:

the Main characters name wasn’t important,the name on the paper was to that fake person.

Also I don’t see what you mean by pronoun inconsistency, I used She when I didn’t use her name... which I probably should of clarified as her name but still

Firstly, the use of quotation marks around the name would solidify it as fabricated.

Secondly,

Butterkingly wrote:

But before I can leave the hellhound notices I left the paper on the bed and grabs it to give to me. They do end up readin it as they come to me. “You clever bum,” she laughs out as she’s hands me the paper.

Okay, the inconsistency is centered around the use of "they," (the nongendered group pronoun), and "she," (the feminine singular pronoun).

Also, "she is hands me the paper."

I trust you saw I cleaned up in my first quotation of your response.