User blog comment:Safnar/The Loving Holsterus : Chapter Two Emera's Spell/@comment-108.84.171.94-20141126071414

Once again, grammar. I would suggest someone proofreading for you. But I love your story to such a degree right now. Its deeply engageing while also following the actual traits of the mamano you selected, minotaur included. Youre working hard and I appreciate it, but do work on that grammer. You actually used witch(pointy hat, broom, magic) instead of which. To a degree it subtracts from reading because internally youre either attempting to correct it, or to make sure youre reading it properly. But overall, MOAR!!!!!!