User blog comment:Gnomehunter/The Fairy Kingdom/@comment-44242415-20201003110622

I wish I was as productive as you are.

While I think it's a nice story, it feel a bit like a cluster of random isolated idea with no connection between them at some parts. The change in Marie is really quick and suddent. I am not really fan of the first assault, it seem a bit random and uncalled, even if it make sense but I generally personnaly prefer a more romantic approach despite the setting.

The whole text is bold, I don't know why it's a bit disturbing.

It really motivate me to try my hand on the challenge, but I have a way harder time coming up with a story.