User blog comment:BTR180/Amaryllis/@comment-28358106-20180311052929/@comment-28358106-20180311063614

Head over pseudopod? At any rate, no, don't. It's fine as it is. This is a true short story in that every nonessential element is trimmed, and that's what you need. Work a little on punctuation and square away your flow. But your text body is fine.