Board Thread:What Would You Do?/@comment-37638981-20190101161656/@comment-29661846-20190102143708

Beyond making new lines before and after dialogue for the sake of clarity, your writing is good! This line in particular was the only one I had trouble with.

''Attempting to be diplomatic, I say "I'm sorry, what? If you don't wanna come, that's okay. But, uhhh, let me just say Congratulations, you've earned it, and hopefully we can meet up la-." ''

[New line and continue]

It simply makes the dialogue easier to read and less congested, seeing as how it's otherwised smushed in a bunch of text. Same goes for the Bunyip speaking, she gets a new line as well.

Lastly, when using descriptions such as "squirms" and "Vineshroom", make it only single quotations, save the double ones strictly for dialogue. Having characters recount dialogue within dialogue (like when the Bunyip speaks at the end), also uses the single quotation, which you were right with.