Thread:AngryLance/@comment-37028137-20200128044919/@comment-39280634-20200928193110

Alright, I want to talk a little about each part.

1) Him being colder and harsher because of his previous, traumatic regenaration is pretty understandable. And I kinda like how hes les merciful towards threats (I know, rather edgy but I appreciate some heroes who can be terrying towards shitheads). And bonus points for still being goody-two-shoes deep down.

2) I like the werewolf bit and how it was killed; sometimes you don't always have silver at hand so you have to try something more... destructive.

3) The Charles Dickens bit was also nice. And I can't help but feel it's like a parallel to us two: me sometimes helping you (a little) over your drafts. Though it's weird because you're supposed to be Nick, hehe.

4) Finaly, some stock Doctor Who villains. Wonder if we will ever see Daleks, Sontarans and Weeping Angels (uh actualy, no Angels; they're scary fuckers). Also, that bit about the Order of Silver Seraphim is pretty cool. Like The Order 1886, except good (it's a third person shooter game on the PS4 that's heavy on cinematics and narative fail).

5) More adventures with the Order (wait, that doesn't sound right...); the parasites with the blood weeping are fairly creepy. The bit about Jack the Ripper kinda sucks (I mean, it's good but it suck that they had to let that mofo get away). Would things really had been worse if they stopped him ? Would ANY tragedy or disaster lead to worse fates if they were prevented ?

6) And now the ending: Nick getting stabbed in the neck if fairly brutal. Though again, kinda feels quick and anticlimactic (then again, she couldn't stab Nick's two hearts simultanously... shit, I just made it darker myself). I remember how you said you're kinda going for 'unceremonious deaths' so there you go, you nailed it. I'm guessing you also meant to talk about the 'child killing'. Yeah, it's messed up. But IT IS historicaly accurate; I also heard of a woman from Victorian era that would keep children around until she collected some kind of child suport, after which she would kill them. I think she was called Black... something, can't remember.

Anyways, while I personaly wouldn't dabble in 'harmed infants' trope, I feel it's historical accuracy would be greatly appreciated. So I say keep it, but make it very indirect and vague/omnious; let people imagine the rest...

As for Nick's regeneration, I don't have much to say. Maybe make his fight with Amelia a little more grueling and close-called. If I can make a suggestion: make Amelia's defeat just as brutal; just to give the dark ending a tiny bit of catharsis.

This my impression of it (I felt the need to go a bit indepth, seeing as you waited for my sorry-ass; even writting all this took me a while). Let me know if maybe you agree or perhaps I said something dumb or whatever.