User blog comment:MockingJester/Doctor, do you need a doctor?/@comment-32042142-20190508125120

Really good story, just a tiny little note, at the beginning, you refer to the Angel who came in André house, as ... Well "the angel", and it's eventually confusing since it could be also refer to the Houri (That would be complicated to do refer her as something else, since it's literraly what she is). Well it's just a little detail. x)

" However, as we all know, monsters have a lower rate of pregnancy...save for these two, unfortunately..." "

At first I thought that they had an actual highter rate of pregnancy, since the "save for these two" imply that it's the opposite of what have been stated right before. However, after reading again, with the sentence before : " There is a couple earnestly trying to conceive a child " then it make sense that she meant something like : "Monster struggle to have children, the reason is that they have a lower rate of pregnancy, however it's not the reason of those two."

Well, my formulation is pretty bad, but I've been slightly disturbed by this statement... It's just a really really little detail, and the very next dialog clear up the point, but I guessed I would let you know anyway. ^^"