User blog comment:LtTora/Home Sweet Home Chapter two/@comment-1826623-20150909044724

Hehehe...I think we've got a fight on our hands. An improvement from the previous chapter, if a bit fast-paced for my tastes. No matter, it was definitely a fun read! I liked how you integrated the very basics of Mamono into this chapter as well as their charms on unsuspecting humans. However, you should try to aim more for the original path rather than to strictly 'follow the book', so to speak. I'm expecting great things from you in the future, so don't worry about trying to please everyone. Instead, just be sure that you've projected yourself enough that people take note of you.