Board Thread:What Would You Do?/@comment-34904368-20181105070927/@comment-36855838-20181106081042

SmartProtagonist wrote: Very nice, but sort of looking for scenarios if you know what i mean. Yeah, oddly enough, I'm more of a lore-lover, though I've been an active writer here.

Honestly, this is two kings and a pair of rooks, no position could really be counted as a win here, unless the escape will start during the meal or something. But considering the stuff I've seen handwaved with "magic" before, you could probably whip up a good escape.

Of the things I would find difficult in writing this tale, I would list them like so, in order of difficulty from greatest to least.

1. Making it believable that our Heroine has managed to blend in for this long. (Few monsters could, and so the options for the species of our leading lady are vastly narrowed.)

2. Nailing the threat and presence of the brother in law, he should be intimidating somehow, whether through guile and observational skills, slowly picking apart our heroine's facade, or through some great stature or inhuman shows of strength, though he seems to possess both. We must believe somehow that both:

a. He somehow did not figure it out despite his prior successes and

b. He will figure it out on his own by the end of the story, to give a proper payoff to his terrifyingly ruthless and successful nature.

3. Making the odd love of the Heroine by this family and their simultaneous acceptance of their murderous son both believable, and humanizing.

4. Contriving an escape or other conclusion that feels like an earned narrative payoff.