Board Thread:Fan-made Monsters/@comment-31293843-20170226165646/@comment-27950421-20170227125009

Well this is rather short... I would suggest doing a bit more to flesh this out because right now it seems like I'm looking at some bare bones writing. It's like you put down what you're going to write about than having actually written it.

I would suggest that you avoid using other mamono for information. Instead of saying that they have a lamia like attitude, describe the attitude. It'll get you a bit more of a word count and it'll help set these girls up as their own thing instead of just ripping off stuff from other mamono.

If you're gonna go into making mamono, then you should thoroughly analyze the writing style of people who make mamono that you like, take that writing style and change the problems you see in it and use that.