Thread:AngryLance/@comment-37028137-20200128044919/@comment-37028137-20200220000700

Greetings Lance,

I just finished reading Part 2 of your story,and I really enjoyed it. (Yes, I know the second half of my review is fairly late. A long week all in all.)

Seeing Meri Bell's backstory pertaining to her sister and father was intriguing I cannot wait for it to be explored further. It also gives a deeper meaning to her more cheery and overprotective nature seeing as her family has disappeared.

The addition of Lina into the cast of characters was a good one. She is obviously insightful and was quick to discern Lance's obfuscation of the truth. I think she is going to be watching him closely.

In the small amount of interaction between the characters you have managed to convey their backstories and motivations fairy well; and given the readers a mystery to mull over at the same time. I am certainly interested to see where this goes.

By the by, is Lance's symbiote-esque addition sentient?

I think this story is engaging and interesting thusfar. Let me know what you think about my thoughts so far and whether you want me to keep reviewing the forthcoming chapters.

Cheers,

The Weary TimeLord.