Talk:Kraken/@comment-28935784-20151220103111/@comment-25817038-20160116070144

Not bad, a lot of sentences are much too short as the story progresses. The short sentences actually work very well for the grim start. Simple, cold, emotionless and calculated statements of a man knowing a grim fate is inevitable as well as only moments away, but later on some more body could be added.

Read the first part before he gets taken under while listening to Lost Time by Kevin MacLeod certainly helped set the mood too. I recommend reading through it while listening.

A part of me wants to go with the traditional, "I jump into the countless arms of my gorgeous Kraken girlfriend and bone her till the end of days in our humble little abode and have countless little Kraken's running around the house."

But again, Lost Time playing in the background - I could somehow see at the near end standing in front of the door, the man knowing that family and friends wouldn't want to see him stuck, imprisoned in this hellhole for the rest of eternity never to see the light of day or the world beyond these walls ever again. He takes one look back at that 'shit-eating-grin' on her face, lets out a sigh, and steps outside, shutting the door behind him, refusing to accept this fate she has chosen for him.