Thread:HoundTheDestroyer93/@comment-27495139-20160223044340/@comment-25808351-20160224040817

Ok, here, we, go.

At 25. third line: (the grand began to shake) ground began to shake. At 57. (carefully explore the ruins and map it out and document and landmarks or other interesting finds along the way.) take out the "it" and change up the third "and" to "any". At 65. Second line: (passageways .) cut the extra space. At 65. Sixth line: (dead in) dead end.

Ok buddy, that is round one.