Board Thread:Roleplay/@comment-37523810-20190601225408/@comment-38248322-20190616090339

(Well...I think you're doing fine. Also, in terms of improving...honestly I don't know what could be improved. Maybe delve into the council in Zipangu now and again for insight to the perils the Zipanguan continent faces? Plus by changing the 'Concersion' bit you made it go either way, which is an actual plus for the story.

Also, there could be numerous factions gunning for control of the Zipangu region, like clans duking it out or some Order forces becoming rogue after seeing end results go south. But that's just my thoughts...)