Board Thread:What Would You Do?/@comment-28718853-20181023004315/@comment-32042142-20181103122537

That's aproblem I often encounter when reading your reply JustThereToWrite, but I have a really really hard time understanding your story. It's really hard to keep track of what's going on, sometime, character are doing something, then the second after they are doing something else or completely change their mind or something like that.

This story is a good exemple :

" Let's go you two, we need to head to my ship, I'll need supplies. "

Why he sudently talk to them so casually while he just meet them? Weren't they litteraly trying to attack him? This is this kind of suddent and innapropriate behaviour I often see in your stories, It feel so suddent, like you just tried to quickly settled the situation.

Sorry if I sound disobliging, and I'm not good at writing at all, but after seeing so many of your stories, I just really wanted to pointed this out.