Thread:Lionrunner/@comment-37028137-20200609203807/@comment-37028137-20200621200709

Greetings Lion,

My goodness you are a fast worker, wow. Another long day, or rather night for me so I saw this a bit late.

I have several notes on this drawing since you said Vellantha was a tough one.

Hmm, I would say I like the facial design overall, she's always bubbly and optimistic so you nailed that happy look. Though her horns should curl upwards and then slightly out to the sides, would you also remove the oblong pieces in front of the horns as well? They remind me a tad to much of Druella (Ugh)

I would say the only other major change would be could you make her more muscular, that's one of main things about her character that sets her apart from her sisters she's a warrior and explorer. So Vellantha is really tall and very toned and muscled. (I thought that was a great joke in the novel she looks big and imposing  until you get to know her and realize she's  a 'gentle giant' (Did I use that phrase right? I'm not good with the venacular.) Also remember her size at 7ft Vellantha stands a good head higher than Nicholas and a good head and a half over the other characters.

Let's see what else...I love the clothing, very casual which is good. She's very restrained and doesn't like wearing skimpy outfits as opposed to her sisters, so you're on the right track there. My only thought would be trousers instead of a skirt. (For instance in Chapter 32 there is a grand party at the Royal Makai everyone else is wearing ballgowns and fur cloaks, and the like. And Vellantha comes dressed in an undershirt, a dark jacket, black trousers, and caulk boots and thinks it's ok. Whereas Nicholas turns up in a three piece suit, undershirt, and his grey overcoat, and thinks it's perfectly natural. So she is very caual and he, isn't.) Basically they're both weird and out of place. I love the disticntion between the characters so I always try to find a way to write scenes that puts them at odds with the rest of the ensemble cast.

As a side note how are you at drawing weapons? One of Vellantha's most prized possessions is an ornate sword made from Demon Realm Silver which she carries everywhere. If you'd be up for it, it would be interesting to see how you visualize it.

The wings are good, for reference in real life when creating the character I based the wing design on a Daubenton’s bat which are native here. The only fantasy element I added was that I gave the inner fingers of the wing a sort of spiky design. And gave them a greenish hue. I can't see the tail so I cannot comment on that.

Overall I think you did very well, this is a great start, and I hope my thoughts help to some extent.

Let me know if you have other questions or thoughts.

Cheers,

The Weary TimeLord.