User blog comment:SPARTAN-047/Harems Can Be A Pain/@comment-30895326-20170430214647

Boy, this was a long one. Also I'm just going to come out and say it. Even though I have and will read through these, I don't really care for the muscle worship. I like a little muscle on my girl but these paragraphs of their abs and bulging muscles don't really do it for me. But that's just my problem.

I think the lead Jinko being white should be mentioned a little more. It's only brought up once and it's not when she's introduced.

"Akira raised the hammer agin and ran at her" I think you meant axe.

I hope this didn't sound too critical. It was still a good story and I did enjoy it, especially the ending.