Thread:AngryLance/@comment-37028137-20200128044919/@comment-37028137-20200527180902

Greetings Lance,

"Perhaps you can put that ship on the first image. You could have a very good combination."

You do realize what you've done right? You just opened the Pandora's Box of Nerd Culture: Complaining About the Minutia that Doesn't Matter! Now for '''the nerd rant! '''(Sorry as a self respecting Nerd I'm obligated to do this.)

What?! You want me to put an image of a Starfleet Officer who is clearly wearing a uniform from the  2260s  with a Starship design that wasn't implemented until the Refit of the  late 2270s  Are you nuts you Peta'Q?!

My god man have you no sense of continuity? Putting those two objects together is tantamount to hammering a square peg into a round hole, or just casually giving a 24th Century warp core consisting of a matter/antimatter reaction assembly (M/ARA) utilizing deuterium and antideuterium reacting in a dilithium crystal matrix to a 22nd Century NX-Class vessel! They don't go together, it's inconceivable!

Why if you're going to be that laissez faire with the lore you might as well say the Borg encountered Humans way before the 24th Century! (Oh wait Star Trek: Enterprise already did that didn't they? Damn.)

Uh well uh...What about the Klingons Lance what about them?! in TOS they don't have ridges on their heads we all know they only get ridges in Star Trek The Motion Picture, set in 2273. But chronologically they lost their ridges in 2154 due to genetic tampering, but now the klingons in Star Trek Discovery have ridges. And that's set in 2256. '''Why is that Lance? Why?!'''

Here'sabetterquestionifallthetechnologyfrom2260looksoutdatedinTOSthenwhydoeseverythinginStarTrekDiscoverylookbrandnewandupdatedwithhologramswhichtheyclearlydidn'thave!Theyalsohavesitetositetransporterswhichshouldn'texistyetnotuntilthe2350s!Andthat'sthe24thCentury.Orwhataboutsyntheticlifeforms!CommanderDatawascreatedbySoongin2338butthere'saroboticofficerontheUSSDiscoveryItdoesn'tmakeanysense!AHHHHH!

--We apologize for the nonsensical ramblings that you just read, please stand by while Weary is rebooted. Thank you for your patience.--

Uh...Oh bother I've done it again. Now for something wholesome to cleanse the Nerd rage.

Right where was I? Ah yes your radical branch.

Thank you for purchasing this lecture on eight track tape entitled "So you want to create a clandestine organization: Seven easy steps to covert operations."

So I assume your character and stories take place in the same Universe as the aforementioned Pramool/Aleric, Cerberus, Victivius, The Gray Man, The Reptile King and the other Beast Kings, and The Archaics?

If they do exist in your world then it makes sense why you would want an organization to help level the playing field against these other State Super Powers. My own Universe has the U.M.S.E.I. which becomes the UMC, we also have M.A.M.CO, and DODI (Work in progress, that name may change) but the Order is far more an evil regime than other Universes so there's a need for such organizations.

But you also need to consider what threats do you face in your Universe? What sort of folks and characters populate your world, what weapons do you have, what's the ultimate goal once the threat is subdued? Frankly put does your story warrant such groups or is it just because 'everyone else', I.E. a lot of people have one? (There's no judgement meant by that question, I'm just trying to ascertain the type of story you're building.)

That being said you can work such an organization into the narrative structure. But it would probably have to be proceeded by a 'reality shattering wake up call' and that is going to fundementally alter the way your characters see their world, they sort of lose their innocence as a result of this horrible event.

When you say "eliminating high level threats" what precisely does that mean? I know in Marius' realm that means kill. He's into Yanderes, which I don't get but to each their own.

Remember that violent Mamono are an outlier and not the rule. Even 'violent' means far less where a Mamono is concerned than it does to Humans, I always assumed 'violent' meant they were just a tad rough and there are no truly 'violent' Mamono as we may consider the idea.

So 'Super Incubi' Ah the super soldier trope well it could be good I'd have to see how you use it. Again to make this pay off work you need a concrete and terriying threat for them to face. The question becomes: What outside malevolent force is so terrible and so strong that there is a quantifiable need to have an arms race of inhanced individuals? Which again precipitates the fact that you need to make readers feel the fear and the threat. If it's hokey then it won't work, your enemy needs to make several forward moving and meaningful gains in the war. In simpler terms the good guys are going to need to suffer horribly so, and it can't be a quick fix solution that make everything alright for the heroes at the end of the chapter. No there need to be long lasting, even permanent ramifications to any war with such stakes!

Also I like the leader, just make sure she has more to her backstory than 'mysrerious woman or shadowy figure'

Well I hoped my machiavellian machinations helped. I know it helped me, while writing this I came up with the big secret to Vellantha's childhood and figured out the source of her trauma. So even indirectly, thanks for the help Lance.

Cheers,

The Weary TimeLord.